The beginning of the end. [Villanelle]

I'm not sure the format of this kind of poem, but I'm, sure you did an excellent job in following the structure. This was a really good poem, there wasn't any one line or verse I really liked. It was a good poem though.

Wow... this poem is wonderful... definitly the best i have read so far .. you do good with a given structure

the flow is wonderful

i also think it clever how you say "blotted pink wax upon a glassy surface. " repeatedly and finally in the end explain it as the lava lamp. its beautiful how you took such a simple object and made a poem that was filled with emotion and such longing for memories. wonerful job .. really :D

Um yah I didn't quit get what you were trying to get a cross other then being about memories being missed. I really don't know what you could do to make it easier to understand. It still had a great flow to it though:) I gave it a 5 out of 5.

This poem didn't really make sense to me.
Maybe you should work on that.
Or maybe you can explain so I can give you a better comment. :]

Very nicely written!
You have wonderful talent!
I really like the imagery.
My favorite part was...

Slowly twirling around as a sweet kiss.
Softly touching only the tips as
blotted pink wax upon a glassy surface.

^^ I loved this stanza
to me it was very original so nice job!!