Hidden depths

by Espoirfailed   May 14, 2007


I know exactly what I'm not
And in case I forgot,
The ideal you hold,
Is not what I've got.

I am surrounded by beauty
But only the imperfections
Catch my attention.
And if you hadn't noticed
I crave your affection.

So go paint something pretty,
Not that it'll be enough,
I am humorous and witty,
But you don't like that type of stuff.

I barely touch the surface,
But a storm brews overhead.
I was looking for a purpose,
But found hopelessness instead.

Ice digs a little deeper,
And depth isn't so profound,
So with each day I grow weaker
'till my feet can't touch the ground.

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  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Wow, I may have gotten the wrong idea out of this...but the idea that I did get I absolutely adore! You have a way of drawing a reader in from the first line and keeping them in until the end where they wish it were longer. Your poems hold so much depth to them. I really enjoyed this one. =]

    5.5
    <3

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Excellent. Very simple, not complex, but it flows brilliantly.

    "I barely touch the surface,
    But a storm brews overhead.
    I was looking for a purpose,
    But found hopelessness instead."

    ^ I absolutely adored this stanza. The last line here is just so despairing and makes the reader feel truly sorry for the persona.

    Good write.

  • 16 years ago

    by Simply Josh

    This was a sad poem with simplicity and I think that that's what made it a great poem. Every stanza gave a sad meaning. Well done
    cheers, josh

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