Disappointment [Reverse Etheree]

by Tammie   May 21, 2007


Disappointment obvious in her voice
It quivers, about to break in two
A single silent tear falling
Clashing with her fading smile
Her heart sinks. This feeling
All too familiar
Tearing this girl
To pieces
Just once
More.

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A Reversed Etheree Consists of 10 lines with the syllables of : 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1.

* This is my first attempt of this style. Comments on improvements would be much appreciated. Thanks. *

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  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    I liked your topic.
    It was very... catchy.
    I've always loved poems that had formats.
    I've never done it before, so I dunno.
    I just think it's pretty hard.
    I'm always doing freeverse stuff.
    Lol.
    Dear, this was a wonderful poem.
    It was simple and easy to read.
    5/5 :]

  • 16 years ago

    by kitkat girl

    I have never seen a Reversed Etheree before! Very cool that you took on this unique idea for the poem, this poem is also well written.
    peace

  • 16 years ago

    by David

    The ending is what i found was trully excellent the most. it was fantastic and full filling. the heart ache you produced at the end was uncanny. well done.

    5/5 David

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    First off I'd like to say thankyou for the comments on my poems, much appreciated. Secondly I'm glad my poems inspire just a little lol. Now onto the poem i truely enjoyed reading this, each word held strong emotion which was portrayed beautifully. Your vocab was excellent and flowed nicely throughout the whole thing. The syllable count was spot on from what I could see which was great. I liked how you gave this style ago its one of my favs. Well done with this. Amazing~mel

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Lol...that's your first try...OMG!!!.EXCELLENT WORK...Very beautifullly penned...i like d this one...just used little words..but u hv said so much thru this superb write!!
    lovely work..kp writing!
    xxPoojaxx