Meaningless Promise

by Tammie   May 29, 2007


Empty words promise
Everything and
Nothing.
Spite filled remarks
Meaningless expressions.
You say you don't even know
What you do that hurts me so
Deep within.
Craving the feeling your words
Your sweet, insincere words
Create inside my heart;
Bursting,
Trembling,
Plainly; in love.
Like an innocent little child
With their favorite possession.
The full feeling I never want to
Disappear.
Although,
Deep down,
I know it's artificial.
The everything and nothing
That makes me who I am.
I couldn't live without you,
But,
You're killing me;
Softly,
Slowly,
Silently.
Shattering my heart
Into a million tiny pieces.
You filled me with love,
Lifted me up, just to
Slam me back to the ground,
Again.
Trust, and my heart,
Both given away too
Easily.
Your words; they promised
Everything and
Nothing.
Your promises mean
Nothing.

* This is my first freeverse poem. Please comment and leave suggestions on how to improve. Thanks. =] *

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  • 16 years ago

    by Cyma Khan

    That was really nicely done...i like ur style with free fall of verses...
    5/5

    God bless u

  • 16 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I understand what it's like to love somebody so much that it hurts you to be away from them, yet they hurt you so much it's hard to be around them. Another fantastic poem and I did enjoy the free verse style in this one, excellent vocab and imagery. 5/5 GG23

  • 16 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    I liked how you didn't be hard on yourself to make it rhyme and that was the best solution in my opinion..I liked the wording and the topic
    And I want to help you with a point..but it's just a suggestion

    Everything and:Everything with

    And generally breaks the look when it ocmes to end of a line..But it is just an idea

    Other than that
    It was awesome
    Keep it up,
    Laura

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    You're killing me;
    Softly,
    Slowly,
    Silently.
    Shattering my heart
    Into a million tiny pieces.

    Wow awesome write. Perfect flow amazing really catching. I loved it from my heart 5/5. U r so beautiful in the pic

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This was truely interesting and amazing to read. I love free verse and found you to pull it off amazingly. Your word choice held great depth strong emotions and power. You honestly portrayed the emotion of sadness throughout this beautifully. The flow was perfect for this free verse and I would never of picked this was your first at all. Definitly this deserves a 5/5 in my eyes. Well done loved it alot. This is also why you are on my favs =) ~mel

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