Bleeding Eyes

by Corruption   May 30, 2007


Best attempts have failed,
Lost in an endless twilight,
Everlasting darkness
Eyes seem to bleed,
Death is here but still too far,
I have died is all I think,
Never to feel life,
Gasping for air
Ending my torture,
Yes, this is my death
Evermore will I be here,
Seeing nothing but darkness

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow!!! Unique and really powerful poem, it has amazing atmosphere and you expressed emotions with just a few words.
    Well done! Excellent job on this one, it deserves 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Dying Beautifully

    Hey this one Rocks.... I love it

  • 16 years ago

    by Bryan

    This is a very good poem keenan, i think you would be great at rhyming but this is perfect the way it is, i give it a 5/5!!! keep them coming!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by victoria

    Wow...that is a very good poem.You are very good at choosing your words.I love it!!..dark and myserist(cant spell.lol)..great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    "Ever lasting darkness" (sic) (= Everlasting is one word only.)

    The words bleed, eyes, attempts, darkness, and torture and so-ons and so-ons... gave me visual of pain and despair. Bleeding eyes, I suppose, is undoubtedly a metaphor which depicts of a "sightless" person mourning and becoming extinct soon.

    Pensively sad and gloomy... Nice shot for an Acrostic! xD

    -Debbie Cakes

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