The war in my mind

by IMMORTAL PAIN   May 30, 2007


Everyday i find myself fighting this war with my mind.

this isnt regular war. this one is one of a kind,

this isnt a war of physical conflict to see who will come out on top,

this is a war that if u knew.. ur jaw would drop,

i really dont know if my mind is in the right place.

sumtimes i feel like im floating in space.

yet if i were in space my mind would blow to bits,

has it already blown? or is it just my mind fighting this war?

so confused i really dont know how to fight this battle,

when i try and go fight it my mind starts to rattle,

maybe im just not built for this thinking.

when i fight too much it even hurts when im blinking,

now have u fought a war like that?

have u fought a war were the enemy hits u every moment?

the enemy is built to destroy and torment...

this is an enemy i wasnt ready to fight,

this enemy is who has so much might.

this enemy is winning the battle........

the enemy gets me wen im asleep,

even wen im at school,

even when im at my most peaceful time,

this enemy is an expert and it knows what its doing,

my mind feels like is melting its bout to break down,

oh god wont this pain go away......

now has anywun fought a war like this?

but i think i've dicovered this foe!!

oh wat a trickster!!!! it thinks its got me!!!

i know who the enemy is!! making me feel vanity!!!

for the enemy is my insanity!!!!!!!!!!!

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  • 14 years ago

    by Independence Forever

    The title caught me so I had to read it, the poem keeps you attentive and it's very descriptive which is good, the spelling is something that you might want to work on though

    Your Servant:
    D. Johnson.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, great poem, excellently written from the beginning to the end. You created good atmosphere through it and the choice of words in it is great. You could write it in stanzas, it would be easier to read, but that's just my opinion.
    Well done, 5/5 from me.

  • 16 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Very good job in this write i love how you make everyone aware of how you see it to convey the emotion is a very good talent

    laura

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Ok first off I think you shouldn't use shortcuts in poetry like ur and u for your and you It messes up the flow, and it looks unprofessional, you should spell things out, other than that the flow was good, the word choice was simple yet effective, the emtion was clear, but it could have been stronger, try stepping up the voacb a little to add more power. I hope this isn't too harsh I am just trying to help like you asked. anyways 4/5

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