All I Needed

by Dance Girlie   Jul 3, 2007


A lot of things hurt
the pain wont go away
no matter what i do
it always seems to stay

a lot of bad memories
that brings tears to my eye
i try to hold back
but out slips a cry

the tears start to fall
they slide down my face
right pass my cheeks
at a steady pace

out of the corner or my eye
he starts in my direction
the tears keep coming
i want them to be done

his hand brushes my cheek
to wipe away my tears
a smile slowly creeps
thats all i needed these past few years

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  • 16 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Aww...really cute poem sweetie it had a really great ending 5/5 <33

  • 16 years ago

    by MischieviousMya

    Well written. I feel like we write alike =]]. the only thing i'd suggest is to maybe try and keep the rhyming in the fourth stanza. "Direction" and "done" try RhymeZone.com, I use it all the time =]]. Other than that i loved it!

  • 16 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Isn't it great when you find that special someone to be there for you when your heart has been breaking?

    This was a good piece...you used some common rhymes, perhaps you could change up the wording a bit ..by that I mean don't use "cry and eye".."face and pace"...simply because 108893758 thousand other poets do.....Its hard not too because occassionally I use common rhymes too....but try and switch it up! It'll brighten your piece and draw the readers attention more in your poem! This was still very good!
    Chelsey

  • 16 years ago

    by AMoreMIo

    I really like your poem its really good you show great emotion in this peom...i think a lot of ppl can relate to it ...keep it up ...and good rhyme! it flows greatly

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