Tell Me (Maybe)

by Dance Girlie   Oct 19, 2007


Tell me all the ways you love me
and how to me you would stay true.
Tell me why you really want me
and when we will be through.

Maybe you're the one for me
tell me if you're not.
Maybe you can count on me
will you take the shot?

Tell me if you're playing me
and if I sealed your deal.
Tell me if youre falling for me
and how the bottom's gonna feel.

Maybe you can trust me
if you can't you are mistaken.
Maybe you fill the needs of me
and together we can be taken.

Tell me this will last a while
and that I am your delight.
Maybe it's just me
but I think this feels just right.

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  • 15 years ago

    by PoetryKnight

    This is a very good poem. I felt the feeling. or you could just be good at writting and just decided to throw this on the site. lol. well, loved the poem, hope you read mine, lol, poetry knight

  • 16 years ago

    by Domino0792

    Awesome poem! Way to go on this one. I loved the emotion. You have real talent, dont ever waste that!

    -xx-

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Faithless Watermelon

    I think you should make the lines longer and/or more elaborate. you're rhymes make sense, but personally, and this is just me, i dont like the alternating rhyme scheme, it makes them seem a little too spaced out and sometimes they got lost in the rhythm. dont get me wrong, it was NOT a bad poem, but we can all use some improvement =)

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaylee

    I really loved this! It flowed great! Just all around fantastic!

  • 16 years ago

    by babyPB

    Impressiveeeee. :)

    5/5
    -- if u might have some time,
    kindly check out my poems too.
    [ id really appreciate it ]

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