Parallax Time Stretch [[Free Verse]]

by Teria   Jul 9, 2007


Parallax Time Stretch.

I"m awaiting to see,
exactly
what you see.
I want to know
what you feel,
and what you see.
It's just so very
important
to me.
I want to know
what it means to you;
the world, itself.
And, the life you live.
Too bad that you and I
are living in a
parallax time stretch.
Maybe if we weren't
I would know you better,
hold you a bit closer..
And, see your side
of this world.
That I'm so patiently
waiting to see.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    This is kind of interesting because i havnt seen a poem like this before and i htink that the way you layed it out was really well done :D i hope to read more of your work soon :D xxx alex xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Hm.
    I'm really sorry.
    But, I didn't like this.
    I dislike poems that are written in this form or...such choppy form, since it's not really a form.
    It told a story, yes, but there were no details...nothing to grab my attnetions. That's why I dislike them so much.
    Sorry, Teria. I know you can do better.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Great flow throughout this piece. Not to mention originality is always a nice change. Overall I think this is a well written piece. 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Beautiful, simple and sweet. I really admired your feelings and wordings. Very well expressed and flowing perfect. 5/5 all the way. TC :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    I liked this poem. it is a good read. :) i liked how you put it together and the rhythem was good as well.

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