Ooh! My Soul

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Jul 12, 2007


This is in the sad category because it's about death, and I didn't know where else to put it. =]
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You've got your intentions in a knot and they're hanging from the rafters,
And your judgment is sitting on the roof; now don't forget to jump.
Let's hurry with this pity party and by the way you're prettier than that facade;
We've got more patience then a suicidal and we've got more time then God.

Oh, baby, baby, you've hit my soul, with your failed intentions.
We can only hope the next attempt will be so much more successful.
I'll buy you the rope if you promise to use it all and maybe give us a bit of a review;
We've got more patience than a suicidal, and more time then God, but we don't want to waste it on you.

So plant those feet firmly on the chair, and don't forget to kick it away;
Matter of fact, I'll push it away for you just to insure that it happens nice and easy
And there's no chance of second guessing before you actually fall.
We'll hope you'll make this quick; we'll buy that rope if you promise to use it all.

Now, now, you've got your intentions in a knot and hanging from the rafters,
And your judgement is sitting on the roof; now don't forget to jump.
We'll hurry with your pity party and ask you to jump nice and quick with a nod;
We've got more patience then a suicidal and we've got more time then God.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Kirsty palmer

    Wow! what a great oem, alothough its rather depressing, you penned it beautifully. i love th words that you have chosen to use. Its rather unique i beleive deffinatly deseves a 5/5. very inspiaring!
    CrazyGoNuts lol!
    xXx

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Thw whole poem is very cohesive and it is just in the right category. You have nicely written it and your poems are really unique in rhythm i=and structure. Max ratings dear

    With love
    Fsams

  • 16 years ago

    by DepthofPassion

    I thought this was amazing! The whole flow was great and the line "We've got more patience then a suicidal and we've got more time then God. "...made me smile *shrugs* I dont know why but it kept my attention...I liked that you used it to end the peom as well. 5/5

    Brittany

  • 16 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    I forgot about this.

    CRAZYgoNUT!

  • 16 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Oohh. i love your wording.

    here's what needs to be fixed:
    We've got more patience then a suicidal and we've got more time then God.
    [[than, read through the poem again for this error]]

    wow. i love the tone in this poem. almost made me laugh. i liked this poem, very good. however, some of the lines seemed a little too long and messed with the flow.

    i wanna give you a 4.5/5 but i cant, so ill round it up.