Comments : Waiting For Brighter Days [Villanelle]

  • 14 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    A great message has learned by reading this great poem, but still the question is can we wait for a brighter day?
    you have touched my heart with this poem, because i really love the way you have wrote many reality as a poem.
    keep it up and a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it

  • 14 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    This was a worderful poem... simple yet the message were clear. well, i adore all the stanzas coz, just like the tastelss have written, hopes were enveloped within the lines. and i guess everyday each people hopes for the better and i think most people can't find satisfaction (don't get me wrong) because we wanted to be perfect for that what the world holds. (correct me if i'm wrong) =)

  • 14 years ago

    by Sweet Fragility

    Great poem. I love the lesson behind this poem. Liked the word choice and the flow was smooth. 5/5
    Honesty rarely ever stays,
    Long enough for us to learn,
    Respect, love, and praise
    Fave stanza ^^^^^^
    ~ Lainey

  • 14 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, this poem is so deep and greatly written. I like every stanza, whole piece holds so great message within the lines. I like the wording in this one, and the flow is good, too.
    Truly well done, 5/5 from me

  • 14 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Excellent poem. A wondefully message was portayed here. This poem was very well written and I can only imagine how hard this type of poetry was. The flow and rhyming was good too.
    Very well done. 5/5

    -Shannon <3

  • 14 years ago

    by TracyM

    Wow, i loved this one. it flows beautifully and the choice of words, wow, could really feel the emotion behind this poem. well done.

    xx trace

  • 14 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I believe you did quite well with this difficult format style

  • 14 years ago

    by Kaila

    That was very good
    I quite enjoyed that actually
    i loved the rhyming lines
    and how they switched off and on
    nice work
    5/5
    kaila

  • 14 years ago

    by resisting reason

    That was really good, it turned out really well even tho u said it was hard

  • 14 years ago

    by Spirit

    I like this one better
    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Melpomene

    The message portrayed was stunning I truely enjoyed reading this work with such a great meaning portrayed behind it. The style I have tried many times and only pull off pieces which are not to my interest so I give you praise on creating something capturing. Overall a great piece. Well done ~mel

  • 14 years ago

    by lish

    Even thought it may be hard you did an excellent job on it, everything just perfect
    xx

  • 14 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    This is not my favorite one of yours, bit it's interesting and nicely written. Good choice of words through the whole poem, and you picked great form.
    My favorite lines are:

    -Stuck amid our faulty ways,
    Enraged without concern
    Can we wait for brighter days-

  • 14 years ago

    by Kristina

    This was simply amazing. i'm sure a lot of people want the same things, i know i sure can. this poem flowed very well and was greatly written. 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 14 years ago

    by Christina Yap

    I am truly amazed by your talent as well as the way you write different forms of poetry. You truly are gifted and deserve more than 5/5 keep it up!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    This poem is very good.. and it has a strong meaning. you leave the reader questioning. great job on the vocabulary. your flow was great. your rhyming was awesome. all together it was a great poem. my fav part:

    Honesty rarely ever stays,
    Long enough for us to learn,
    Respect, love, and praise

    It had a very strong meaning to me :)

    Excellent Job

    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Wow, you're really good at different types of poetry. The flow was flawless, excellent choice of words. This piece deserve a 5/5!

  • 14 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Wow. This has got to be my favorite by you. It help a meaningful & powerful message && it just makes the reader think. The emotions were strong & the flow was flawless.

    "Honesty rarely ever stays,
    Long enough for us to learn,
    Respect, love, and praise"

    ^ I love the stanza. Overall: 5.5 Amazing job. (:

    -- Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 14 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Wow, Ok I truely loved this piece it was quite amazing. I remember reading alot of your older pieces when your name was different. I can tell you, you have improved alot and I love this. The style again a good choice for this poem and the meaning portrayed was really interesting. the flow spot on it didn't faulter at all. Well done on this beautiful piece.~Mel

  • 14 years ago

    by Blissful

    This one was just amazing. The message was powerful and hope was evident all throughout it. I have never read anything in this style before but it was one I truly did enjoy. Well done *5/5*