Good choice of topic......i love the flow of your poem, and the sadness you wanted to share is smoothly expressed.......

5/5

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Really good poem. =]]

amandaxx.

Nicely written poem, it could be little longer, with some more descriptions, but it sounds truly sincere and it's very touching and sad,
My favorite stanza is:
-So here I am,
Waiting for someone
Here in the dark,
With my broken heart-

Really emotional peice! good flow, and easy to read. well written.

Concentrating your thoughts to a superior writing, keeps our reading go courage, its like a blooming blossom that continues the day go bright. You poems I read, your expressions I studied, your feelings I valued. All and all you deserve, its almost an excellent one I should say. ( 'I mean your writing'). Keep writing, bring more poems and keep me informed, to enable me to feel free to read your interesting poem lettering. Thanks for now, more thanks to follow.. bye!

Luz and Naz
(the two dimensions

The flow in this piece is flawless and you have a magnificent choice of words the only thing I believe would improve this poem would be to make it a little longer.

5/5 A sad poem, I like the topic you chose, it's real and genuine

That was fantastic and your writing has improved so much =) Your so talented and clearly have a very bright future ahead of you =) Keep up your writing and I'm sure you'll go far ~_~ I really loved reading this one and give it a 5/5
Rhea

Oh short type poetry is your style well good..uhm try to use deep words it helps alot..keep it up!!

Galing moh nman!! gnda nitong piece no toh.. hanep.. common but somehow u made the ambiance different in your own little way

It was deep and nicely written, You did a great job on this piece as well, but For the very last line, I though it would look better if it said,
Wishing to be loved,
But no one wants to be my angel sent from above...

Thats just me..It dosesn't really matter. This was good without it...

Keep writting...5/5

I thought this poem could have rhymed better but all in all it was good

HALU LOOK nag comment na aq poem u.meron mi new poems.patriscia,sheena

I find the flow on this isnt that good, it kind of has too many forced rhymes, this was sad though and i credit you on the feelings i got from this.
Love Tara-Kay
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Waw..0_o

ang ganda nito! =)
..and i have nothing more to say..
this was plain yet different, amazing!

5/5 syempre!^__^

I like your honest thought and expression on paper, rember where dry desert end green grass grows

Now that i loved, it was very saddening though. but it was a strong poem, such great imagery. the way it was expressed was beautiful. well done

This poem is so cute and mournful. It is honest and there is no flow problems in it. 5/5 all the way

tc
Fsams

You really sound honest but rhyming seems little forced. Emotions are expressed on a good way but I don't like the last line and first stanza. Rest of it is great, keep up.

Very nice,m i like the note part.

your servant:
atticus