Autumn Walks

"The air is getting cold and crisp
Time to zip up jackets and coats"
- These two lines (as well as the 2 lines in the second stanza) are proof to me that people can pull of a good poem with a lot of 'and's' close together. Usually I can't stand that because it doesn't seem poetic. But sometimes, such as this time, people can pull it off.

One thing I noticed wrong with the poem, or wrong to me. Was that you said 'heading down south to the summer'. While that is correct, they are heading TO summer, I find it a bit more simple to say 'for the summer'. Of course that's a phrase used quite often and you may want your own 'phrase' here.

Good poem, Gem. You have exceptional talent.
As I'm sure you're well aware of.

The flow on your poems seem to be flawless always, I'm so jelous. The vocab was exellent. 6/5 :P xxx alex xxx

I love nature poems, but I'm not any good at writing it. You, I must say, have a talent for them. Your description here is so well written, and the flow was well done, yet again. Well done on a great poem. :]

Tammie

I love the feeling you get out of this one
5/5

The whole feel of this piece is so relaxing and calm. Very serene....and QUIT SAYING MEH!!!lol! :) I mean seriously, you could recite the alphabet and you'd get 15 or 20 comments on it! Lol!!! You're work is incredible, Gem. You are a fantastic poet and I can't wait to read more! :)
~Midnight Sun