Lies

by Shinobi   Oct 18, 2007


I have a good friend
She won't lie or make me feel bad
She enjoys being with me
At least that's what she said

We're used to talk a lot
I have been blessed with a marvelous soul
She won't deceive or make me feel like a hallow shell
In her life I play a big role
At least that's what she used to tell

The talking never ceases to fascinate
We care for one another
The core of our friendship neither could eradicate
For her sake, I would never be reluctant to bother

I had been blessed with a demonic soul
She deceived and made me feel like a hallow shell
Her deceit took upon me a large toll
Now her words haunt me as if I were locked in a cell

She used to tell me I was special
Among her chosen mates
Clearly her role was closer to the embodiment of the Devil
I see now we were not to cross paths, such different fates

She was lying to me for so long
She didn't care for an unsettling conclusion
My sorrow she chose to prolong
And now I know it wasn't but a mere illusion

You portrayed me as irreplaceable
Nothing other than one of a kind
Your words of faithfulness were unmistakable
However, all you did was toy with my mind

0


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    I really liked how you said:

    so she said. or so she told me.. it put a lot of strength behind it.. i think you should have done that to more of the stanzas..

    but other than that it was amazing.. the rhyimng.. the flow ..

    great job

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    I really liked how you said:

    so she said. or so she told me.. it put a lot of strength behind it.. i think you should have done that to more of the stanzas..

    but other than that it was amazing.. the rhyimng.. the flow ..

    great job

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    A good write.
    I think the begining could be stronger, it seems you were struggling with rymthes and it through off the flow.However the ending was just amazing, I really liked how you turned it around. It was very powerful, and the flow was great.

    Well done,
    --Elly.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Except first three stanzas this poem was amazing. I really enjoyed in it, it is very original and you expressed emotions on truly superb way. Good topic too, very deep and personal piece. You described twisted feelings on simply beautiful way. Well done!

  • 16 years ago

    by Eri

    OH wow This Is reallly goood!