What do I have to do?

by Shinobi   Oct 21, 2007


Watching you all day
Want to be closer to you
I tried to be a good friend
What do I have to do?

I want you to treat me
Like you treat other guys
I want you to see
I want you to realize

If you want, my envy will go away
Every bad detail will disappear
I'll always have things to say
And won't try to be to near

Why is it so tough?
Why can't I be treated like the others?
I always want to be treated fairly
But I'm the one that eventually bothers

If you want me to change
Just say and I'll obey
I'll do it in a sec
But I have one condition, if I may

I want to be treated like the others
I want our friendship to be true
So please, tell me
What do I have to do?

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  • 16 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    Sad how much we crave to been loved like everyone else is.. Great job i really loved that last stanza.. amazing flow and rhyming

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    The flow was great on this poem, I found it to be held together nicely to create a sweet and sensitive poem which held deep emotions from being treated differently. I'm sure many people can relate to this poem so you didn't just write for you, you wrote for other people in the same situation aswel. Good work ~mel

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    This flowed excellently.
    I liked the reptition it added to the peice. The feelings were relatible.. However I must say, - You shouldn't change yourself for someone, they should love you for you.
    But other than that I thought this was a very good read.

    Well done,
    Elaine.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Maybe you and I have different look on poetry but I don't like this poem too. I really don't want to offend you, or anything like that, but only thing that I liked about this piece was your honestly expressed emotions. You know, you don't have to rhyme every poem, this one could be a lot better without it, because your rhymes in this poem was predictable and they seems forced, you just ruined flow with them.
    I love deep poetry with a lot of metaphors, and good imagery mixed with emotions, so this isn't really my style. I won't rate it.

  • 16 years ago

    by Eri

    I LOVE THSI ONE!!!!!!!