Laced Illusions

by Nix   Oct 28, 2007


While I stare into her white dress
-which luckily she has never wore-
I cry, washing the face with melting ice;
again- my sleepless nights are liquid.
Even the monsters pushed me away,
now, while the whole world is dying- no one sees.

Her silver necklace-
my source of crimson pain,
I cried out all blood, surely;

the controller of the world dropped commands,
so I'm getting lost in wanted touch.
One more part of my sinful heart is dying.

And I know- I could get her back,
but the doubt crawled through the void
that the others called -soul-.

I shoot the Moon,
pointed out hostility,
let the desperation be my blazon.
The love is most deathly bullet.
I'm dying in my immortality.

Laced glow we shared;
illusion, everything is scattered.
That's their united revenge-
God and the Devil- Universes maniacs;

Humiliated I bow the head.
It's not worth it- I know;
but as I stare in her white dress
- which unfortunately she has never wore-
I cry, washing the face with melting ice.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Silent Screams

    Love it. It Just wow'd Me, honestly! My eyes couldn't leave the poem as i read. you had me from the beginning to the end. I Loved it. Keep Writing. you have a lot OF Talent.
    Keep It Up =]

    -Ally

    P.s- 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    I love this piece. I read it four times by now. The imagery is absolutely fantastic and the portrayed emotions endlessly intense. Whole piece is excellently written, filled with amount of touching feelings. Mixtures of emotions are truly overwhelming from the beginning to the end.
    My favorite stanza is:

    -I shoot the Moon,
    pointed out hostility,
    let the desperation be my blazon.
    The love is most deathly bullet.
    I'm dying in my immortality.-
    ^^^
    I like metaphorical content of this part. Truly effective.

    Keep up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    Wow a trully powerful poem again this one really touched me very amazing very good i loved very much your trully a really great poet and one of my favorite authors 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Wonderful job!
    your imagery and vocabulary was just outstanding
    nice job
    i truly enjoyed it
    i dont see any room for improving on this one
    5/5
    kaila

  • 16 years ago

    by X Kashies Misery X

    Worn*

    dude that is one of the most randomest poems ive ever read...
    0_0 *gasp* =p hehe... nah but its good, it just flows really well no matter what random thought you switched to..i liked it, although I didnt get it enough to connect with it..

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