Depressed Thoughts

by crystaljean88   Nov 4, 2007


Not enough words, too many thoughts,
With all these problems, my mind slowly rots,
No more love to given my heart is in knots,
All this pain, hurts like getting stabbed with shots.

Everything is wrong, never is it right,
For i am always to blame, day and night,
keeping my hurt inside, tears out of sight,
Why is it always me, supposedly i start the fight.

I hate living this way, in this messed up life,
Always thinking about my problems, giving me more strife,
No more happiness and no more love, i will never be a wife,
So much depression and a lot of hurt, many thoughts about grabbing the knife

this isn't done yet.. but these r my thoughts so far

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  • 16 years ago

    by silvertung69

    Try stress in place of problems and minds slowly rot. It will help w/the flow and say the
    same thing.

  • 16 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    Im a fan of not having my poems rhyme and you have done that. You just let your emotions come out without that added effort. Your poem is pure and beautiful.

  • 16 years ago

    by skynerraw

    Wow. It was very well written, expressed your emotions amazingly. It was strong with emotion. It framed how ,I'm sure, a lot of people feel. The last line seemed a little long to me, but if you like it then keep it. Well written, nice to read. 5/5!

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    I liked this poem a lot, there was a lot of strong feeling depicted carefully in the poem but I feel like the rhyme scheme was strained at times, particularly in the end. The vocabulary was fine bu twith a few tweaking, this poem could be even stronger. Good work though!

  • 16 years ago

    by Nikko McMorbid

    Loved it. (-_-) huhuhu dam*

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