Six Feet Under The Desolate Stars

by Stephanie   Nov 21, 2007


Stop. Rewind. Play.
These words and struggled gasps for air are etched into my mind,
Leaving behind a trail of hopelessness; I'm searching for things I can't find.
I'm walking through the cold ash, with nowhere to plant my feet,
And my self-conscience is glowering at me; My heart dares not to beat.
I'm a piece on a chess board with limited moves that I can make,
And every time I acknowledge your presence, the more you seem to take.

My legs run around the corner, but my memory can't escape your face -
Shining like an angel; How do you manage to hold your hurt with such grace?
My lips quivers with awe, at how capable you are to play this game.
When I went to attempt such a dangerous thing, I failed to run from the blame.
These years blur together right before my eyes and I ponder how you are,
Because after all the time I spent well... I'm now lying six feet under the desolate stars.

``Yes, it's a bit confusing, and I'm sorry, but that's what I'm feeling - Confused. But still comment and rate. :D I will return the favor.

November 21, 2007
-- Stephanie Lynn .+.

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  • 16 years ago

    by IllNeverBGoodEnouf

    Wow...super good...sorta confusing...but its ahmazing..so yeah..5/5!<3

    ~heather lynn-so wear me like a locket around your throat ill weigh you down and watch you choke~

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, wow, wow!
    I'm amazed with this piece and honestly impressed! Whole poem is excellently written and it has great choice of words and flawless descriptions. It is not confusing to me, I can relate to it in so many ways.
    The imagery in this piece is so vivid and unique and emotions are expressed amazingly!
    I like everything about this piece, and I think that you should be really proud on yourself for writing this.
    My favorite lies are;

    -I'm a piece on a chess board with limited moves that I can make,
    And every time I acknowledge your presence, the more you seem to take.-
    ^^
    So deep, fantastic

    The title is also brilliant.
    Keep writing, you have a great talent!

  • 16 years ago

    by HaileyHelen

    Your style is one that is all your own! i find that awsome! you can really tell your words are just that... your words! u really have a tallent for painting pistures

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Okay first off, I think you are truly talented when it comes to picking a title for you poems. They truly wow me.

    The poem itself was another wonderful write by you. The emotions were real and raw; your vocabulary was perfect. I loved how you starte your poem, it had me hooked.

    You should never be sorry for what you are feeling or for what you write. And never let anyone put you down for your work because you are truly talented.

    Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I really enjoyed this piece of art, The story behind it was portrayed nicely, really deep and capturing. The emotion was effective and I like how this was a poem but yet sort of a prose/story at the same time. You really put alot into this and it was easy to follow. Really a nicely written poem. I enjoyed it and give you a 5/5~Mel

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