Chain Me to Obscurity

Once again, another gorgeous poem. This one I really loved, there was none of the repetitiveness that slightly bothers me, and it just flowed so beautifully, all of it. You are a master of non-rhyming poems, you seem to be able to make anything flow perfectly, no matter what it is.
"I mutilated your thoughts before you uttered them"
^This line is amazing, I love the imagery of it and the rest of the poem.
5/5
~gabriella

I mutilated your thoughts before you uttered them,
played with the silver necklaces of trust (heart-shaped)
lived by heretic laws trough your vaporous cold eyes
inheriting pieces of the unveiling circumstances.

^^ I really liked how you put (heart-shaped) in parentheses. It makes it stand out describes the necklace.

I also liked how to repeated these two lines: "I mutilated your thoughts before you uttered them" and "Chain me to obscurity". It really adds to the poem, and gets the point across.

As usual, your vocab was extremely good, as was the imagrey. [I bet you get tired of people saying this, but it's not something you can overlook.]

Fantastic.

Keep writing!
Cayce

Oh boy this was amazing. Your work never ceases to blow me away. I bet you're getting tired of me saying flawless imagery and vocabulary but thats what makes you poems stand out and shine over the rest. You truly do have a way with words to turn and twist them into what you want to say and in no way does it seemed forced but flows naturally.

The meaning behind this was in no way simple and was so powerful .. profound. I love how different people can interpret this in different ways and its not so black and white. Each person can see themselves in this and take something back with them after reading and its truly a gift to impact everyone not just certain people.

Well done on this my dear. I truly enjoyed myself *5/5*

In this poem I favored the color deal; violet, blackness, turquoise and whatnot.

You did a wonderful job once again.
I almost feel useless. ;[ There's no way I can help you improve. lol.

5/5

Wow! amazing job, so vivid and lively piece. I absolutely love your fascinating descriptions. Whole poem is very deep and the way you wrote it is impressing. Well done, every stanza contains mind-blowing pictures and thoughts. You expressed your emotions greatly, also I am in awe with what you did with this title. So powerful write, you deserves top grades for this piece.