Wow. That was unbelievable. The first two stanzas are my favorites. The rhyming scheme is something different... I love it. Great job... and thank you for reading my poem. 5/5

~ Tina

Whoa! That was the best poem i have read in a loooonnnggg time. Everything about it was just perfect...starting with the language. Its filled with emotion and it reminds me of my past. I could understand it 100%. Also, the flow and rhyming of it was perfect. My favorite stanza:

"She's loved and she's lost,
She's been beaten, been tossed,
Till tears ran down to her bloody lips."

IDK y exactly, but that one stuck out to me the most.
Anywho, very good poem. Beautifully written =}
5/5

PrElUdE 2 A KiSs

Well this was very different from anything else I have read. The style/format was unique. This peicce was almost heartbreaking. I loved the depth of the emotion. One thing I didn't like was the little ~ thing in between stanzas. Other than that a nice peice. Great job.

Amber.

Now THAT is a poem. Well done. Some choice stanzas in there. I like the way you broke it up.

Omg.
I love it, Epic win. that was alll.... amazing.
It almost made me cry. ];

Wow, I absolutely loved this poem. I loved the imagery in this and it had so much emotion in it. The flow was the rhyme fit just right. This will definately go into my favs. Great job! 6/5

.:CiNdY:.

Wow! that was captivating piece! i love the ist and 3rd stanza's i really enjoyed reading it alot! the message was very powerful and its kinda very dedicated piece! all those thoughts was very inspiring.. great job5/5

I really love this poem..

I put all my faith in the lord when in need of help...

Its always good to read a poem where someone has gave up and turn to God and the Lord Jesus Christ...

Keep writing 5.5

Nice poem... I like how the ending is soo hopeful

Whoa i like this poem even though the flow is a bit off.. but the message is really what's important in a poem! nice one =]

I loved the way you bring suicide to a new level of understanding. That they are taking this action out of a love of others and lack of love but that no matter what the result of her actions physically, she is safe.

This is a deep story. Another life shattered, another girl finds herself dead. The raw emotions were strong here, the rhyming were also great. 5/5

Another moving poem. The flow was beautiful, and the words chosen were amazing! But again, I don't like the topic. (not religious) And as said before, it doesn't change the fact that this is an amazing poem! 5/5

Well, Atheist or not, very wonderful poem,
though most people we christians believe that suicide is a one way ticket to hell the poem was really really well done. Never mind your beleifs they are waht make you a great poet :).
5/5
<3tay

Interesting and intense, very original. I like the imagery that you created and the fact that I could actually feel everything that you described here. I am an atheist, too and I don't like reading poems that connect with religion but this one is truly amazing. I admire your writing skills, you always manage to impress me.
Excellent piece, filled with tones of deep sorrow and pain.

That was flawless in every sense of the word! Your rhythms were perfect, your choice of words were amazing and you message just wow. That was so clear and every word rolled of the lips.!

Absolutely amazing 5/5

This poem is really good, i think it's my favorite so far! Well done, beautifully written! 5/5!

Well keep on writing that was great!

It's got kind of this creepy sing-songy depression thing going for it that's very hard to put into words. Like what you'd hear in a horror movie, I guess. I could picture her "painting the walls red" frantically, finally giving up. The emotions I was feeling while reading this were tense, and scared, but at the end relieved. The entire poem was great. If I were you, I might consider revising the last line. It sort of feels out of place. Just a suggestion. Otherwise, excellent job! 5/5