A bird

Very interesting poem. The concept had me stunned. The flow was a little shaky, but the word usage was amazing. A very great write. 5/5

I love this poem its really good the opening sentences caught my eye... i loved all the emotion in this Great Job 5/5

Especially love the idea of the bird in this one;

"Of a crying bird with broken wings"

Such a sad image but really powerful.

Em xXx

PS You have a really pretty name!

Two first lines. so true. i know exactly what u mean here. second stanza is really good too. but i just can't relate to it. the poem is still good. that's just my problem :D
aww the third stanza is soo sweet.
fourth. that's really good. the flow is a lil off in this one though but still.
fifth is great. i can feel it. but then it's like it's not over yet. i think you should continue.. i was hungry for more. and another thing that confuses me, is that the first stanza rhymes, and the flow is really good, but then ... you know. Good job anyway, nd thx for the comments.
5/5
tc

The opening lines to your poem was just great and captured my attention.

"Someday I'll turn into a little white bird
And fly a million miles to get to your state"
^ I just loved the imagery and hope throughout those lines.

"That day was sunny, but it seemed like storm
Thunder, lightening, heart into smithereens
A window is open... It was the last song
Of a crying bird with broken wings"
^fave stanza ... the last line was so heartbreakingly beautiful.

Well done*5/5*