Devout Aspirations.

I should not read romantic poems as they make me emotional. This one made me sad in a bittersweet way. I hope it wasn't always to be apart?
I really enjoy the words and the order they are in and after all that is all we can say about a poem.
Excellent.

You always said
I infused light
into the dark crevice
you fought so hard to hide

Possibly my favorite stanza, I can relate to this so well.
This was an excellent poem, the flow was smooth, rippled gently with strong emotions. Excellent piece of work As always

There is such beauty in the words you have written here and I love this poem

You always said
I infused light
into the dark crevice
you fought so hard to hide
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I love this first stanza - it makes me think of someone who may have been depressed or unhappy with themselves and here comes this person who gives them this light so they can see themselves differently. They have fallen in love

The ending is superb. I love the idea of two becoming one.

What a lovely poem!!!

x

Awwww... this poem is so sweet and was such a delight to read. I really enjoyed it.

I liked the opening stanza... I like the idea of 'infusing light into a dark crevice' that this person tries to hide.

I like the 'frost in your touch' part... it was interesting, and I like how you wrote it 'jolted you to pry your eyes open' It reminded me of being awaken by reality.

I absolutely loved this stanza:

But it seems the cosmos
held another scheme
to keep love at a distance
while teasing with
what-could-have-beens

>> what-could-have-beens!! Something we all relate to... I love how you mention cosmos and keeping things at a distance.

but every time the sun tickles you awake
and the moon sways me to slumber

our souls will crochet
into one

>> the ending was simply beautiful. Amazing!

This poem intrigued me because I felt the title actually contradicted the content of the poem in a way. Just my thoughts...at the start of this verse I got the impression the person you are talking about/to may find it difficult to commit even although you mention 'forever' further along in the story. To me the frost could mean this person feels love but can't find a way to convey just yet.

Obviously there is a distance between you and I'm not sure whether you were metaphorically speaking were you suggest that they are in a different country and...that's what I liked...you kept me guessing and....at the end I'm still not sure :)

our souls will crochet into one

I really loved this idea....beautiful!