Came then Left

by Juls   Apr 21, 2006


Monday came...
With a rain storm of bricks
My body all cut and soaked red
Monday left...

Tuesday came...
Healing the wounds
I was too weak so I just weep
Tuesday Left...

Wedensday came...
You wanted to try again
I looked and laughed
Wedesday left...

Thursday came...
Looked at the mirror with shame
I let my chance go of us
Thursday left...

Friday came...
Friday left....
Too weak to last a week
I killed myself for our love

*Ironicy said...True Love.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    Aw that was so sad! I liked the way you wrote it though, it was very interesting to read, and even though it didn't rhyme it flowed really well, great work!

    --Steph

    P.s. In the title, it should be "then" instead of "than"

  • 11 years ago

    by Darien

    Oh one more thing.. "Came Th(e)n Left"

    It's not "Than".. I just realized it.

  • 11 years ago

    by Darien

    Hmm, another poem about cutting. Original? I think not. Umm, if you want to write about a topic that is constantly discussed, at least try to be more creative? Try to look at it from a different point of view. That's my suggestion.

  • 11 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Juls, wow. Was this kind of based on a non-fiction event?? If it wasn`t you sure made it sound convincing.
    5/5

    Samantha Hollywood

  • 11 years ago

    by Witchblade15

    Wow this poem was fantastic...very unique style of writing... but i must say i totally loved it...keep up the good work...im sure to continue readin ur poetry.