Came then Left

by Juls   Apr 21, 2006

Monday came...
With a rain storm of bricks
My body all cut and soaked red
Monday left...

Tuesday came...
Healing the wounds
I was too weak so I just weep
Tuesday Left...

Wedensday came...
You wanted to try again
I looked and laughed
Wedesday left...

Thursday came...
Looked at the mirror with shame
I let my chance go of us
Thursday left...

Friday came...
Friday left....
Too weak to last a week
I killed myself for our love

*Ironicy said...True Love.


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  • 12 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    Aw that was so sad! I liked the way you wrote it though, it was very interesting to read, and even though it didn't rhyme it flowed really well, great work!


    P.s. In the title, it should be "then" instead of "than"

  • 12 years ago

    by Darien

    Oh one more thing.. "Came Th(e)n Left"

    It's not "Than".. I just realized it.

  • 12 years ago

    by Darien

    Hmm, another poem about cutting. Original? I think not. Umm, if you want to write about a topic that is constantly discussed, at least try to be more creative? Try to look at it from a different point of view. That's my suggestion.

  • 12 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Juls, wow. Was this kind of based on a non-fiction event?? If it wasn`t you sure made it sound convincing.

    Samantha Hollywood

  • 12 years ago

    by Witchblade15

    Wow this poem was fantastic...very unique style of writing... but i must say i totally loved it...keep up the good sure to continue readin ur poetry.