Under the influence

"I love him so much
But he is not real
Too intoxicated
and too numb to feel"
^ I love that stanza, especiallyt he last too lines.

You did a great job with this poem. The ending confused me a bit, BUT only because I thought it would be about an ex or current boyfriend, eh.

You did a great job with this poem, as well.
Keep it up. <3 Teria.

Lamp

wow the last stanza of this poem really hit me. Very strong and powerful.
"under the influence
that's where he hides
where he was lost
and where daddy died."

its so true cause when that happens its no longer your father its the alchol taking control of him. The poem itself was very sad. I'm so very sorry that you have to live in that hell. Stay strong, cause what doesnt' kill you makes you stronger. The only critice that I have is in the last stanza you should write the word "and" instead of using a symbol because since the entire poem is written it kind of throws off the flow.

You really know how to touch the reader's nerve.
You have great talent for writing.
I loved this, it has so much depth and emotion in it.
Outstanding work.

Wow. i did not expect that kind of ending. it was amazing. this poem was so heartfelt, you are very good at making me feel for these characters in your poetry, and i think that's one of the things that makes you stick out as a writer. great job! 5/5

This poem is great....it was really hard for me to choose 3 winners in the contest that i had..and yours came really close to winning.