Hmm actually never saw a poem like this before, but i understand the reason behind it. the part thatjumps out at me is when you call him a jerk it seemed a little childish made you sound like idk 13 yrs old, and the repition of needing him and then callling him that showed a great deal of idk assurance withy yourself. great work i really did enjoy it. -
Where are you?
I need you now...
Well more like yesterday
Or the day before.
these first few lines are great- so easily I can relate to them, and that hooked me right into the poem.
I love your style- the short lines really show emotion, abruptness. the lines "I was wrong...
But so were you;
Jerk." show your confidence in writing, which is really great.
The way you brought it back around to the beginning in the close was really wonderful. all in all, a great poem. keep writing!