Tears of regret linger on fraying, pained skin
Millions of unheard wishes remain not given
Desperately trying to turn back the clocks
Praying to God that she will be forgiven..
Kissing him goodbye; fleeing with salty tears
Pulling her down slowly; guilt clings to her heart
An act of adultery and passion she has committed
A sordid crime scars; slowly tearing her apart..
Lying awake at night; tear filled eyes burn
Screaming echoes, throughout her fragile soul
Torturing herself inside; cutting open wounds
Falling deeper and deeper into an unfaithful hole..
Continuing to live life as if nothing ever occurred
Locking away secrets; no evidence does she leave
Battling her guilty lie; agonizingly killing herself
Into a perfect life, the dirt she carefully does weave..
I love this, at some parts it was a bit off, but nothing too bad. The imagery was great, but try to refrain from using one word too many times in one poem..it throws it off. Anyways, I did like this, overall.
I had a long comment typed out but then my stupid signal got lost and the thing was lost.
Anywho, I loved this poem. A lot.
Its not often you see a poem that has described everything so great using the perfect vocab.
It really made the poem stand out.
Its not vocab you can't understand, like some poets use.
But its not extremely simple and boring.
Your stanzas were packed with words yet you never lost flow. Well done.
I loved this ;
"Kissing him goodbye; fleeing with salty tears
Pulling her down slowly; guilt clings to her heart "
Something about it really made me go wow.
"Guilt clings to her heart" <- that was my favorite line I've read in a while.