Heh. The opening line made me smirk for drawing my attention into it immediately. It reminded me of a little villain that I dearly adored in my dark-ish fictional reads. The idea was fine, although I slightly agree with Mr. Robert. You've created a momentum at the start, but it suddenly died out for...unknown reasons...Hmm Anyway, I loved how this poem was finely written with a rather fluidlike flow. (You have my props for that.) My pleasure to read. I love it! Keep them coming, Hippo! Love, Tiger
Excellent poem, I'm working on a similar format poem...not same topic, but same format idea. I like the language and imagery you invoke in your words, but hopefully you don't feel this way in reality. Nonetheless, great work!