Loves pedestrian

by deathdealer   Jun 11, 2007


Your skin so soft
your lips so smooth
these are things that cause my heart to move

with your smile
you make my heart beat
these are the things i would never consciously cheat

when you smile my body goes numb
when we talk my slurred speech
makes me feel dumb
you are the best thing that has happened to me , ever
could i have you? never

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  • 16 years ago

    by Becca

    Wow... this was really REALLY good.

    You put so much emotion in it with a bit of your usual dark self in the end. Great job, keep up the good work!!!!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Why are there so many people all saying that you did a great job with this and it was beautiful ? Don't get me wrong, I like that you expressed emotion , but it was cliche & cheesy to me . Like it seemed like some of the rhymes were forced . Deary, as much as I love (talking to) you, you need to work at it T-T But you're not that bad . With that ending, it was different [: Which I liked .

    ..__MiNDYY

  • 16 years ago

    by Breeeezie

    Awww this is soooooooo cute!!!!!!!!! 500/500

  • 16 years ago

    by Tiffani

    Awww thats so cute. i have allllot of love poems i think ud enjoy

    this was adorable and a great write 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kacey Lynne

    This would have to be one of my favorites cause its like you were head over heals and that is just so cute!

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