Life-long Facade

AHA! I love the first stanza.
At first, I was like, "nice first two lines.. oh, crap! the third line is terrible!" (sorry, being honest...) but then I read on and was like . . . Hey, that makes sense. AND it's stated well.
So all in all, I love the first stanza.

As for the second stanza, it's a little weak compared to the first stanza. Remember: the first stanza creates the level at which the poem resides. By that I mean, if it's great, the rest of the stanzas have to be amazing, just like it. See what I mean?
The second stanza lacked originality, had cliche rhymes, and not much emotion. I really disliked the rhyming in it.

Now, in the third stanza, you are stronger than the second, but still under the first. I did like the second line of it; "no, don't try! you can't!" when the first line was "you can't see what I shield". It just has a lot of .. emotional value to it. Not too bad.

THe fourth stanza: though very different from the rest (it's got a sarcastic tone this time), I did like it. Since it's different, it's not as harshly judge to the first one.. It's a good stanza. And I like the beginning line ("I'm just another drama queen ... I don't need you hunny) ... good lines.

The fifth stanza, though flowing well and okay rhymes, had a cliche meaning/saying. Using eyeliner in poems is over rated.. And, in my opinion, takes away the readers... uh, how do I say this? ... value, maybe?
I mean, it depersonalizes (if that's even a word!) it from the reader because you're taking an object that not everyone uses.. get my meaning? Whew, that was hard to explain.

Now, as for the last stanza. Remember my rant from another comment where I said the beginning, middle, and end are all imporant? Though your middle was weak, in my opinion, both your beginning and ending were eye-grabbers. I really enjoyed reading them both, and they hold my favorite parts of the poem.

Overall, you did a good job. Sure, it was weak, but you hadn't written in awhile, and I know how that is..

Not to mention the "you can't see what I shield"... I realize how personal that may be to you.. and others may not see that.
Anyways.
Good job. Keep strong.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

I loved this one. I don't even know what to say about it, it's just wonderful. Amazing job hun.

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I don't really know what to say, even though this poem was sort of short and I thought the flow was the teensiest bit choppy, it was as if the poem was talking about me. I'm just speechless. The poem was beautiful. 5/5
~gabriella

Chh! kinda rusty? You lie! lol! this was a great poem! okay.. so it wasn't great.. it was freaking awesome! lol, you did a wonderful job on this *excuse me.. you did a freaking amazing job on this* and the lines flowed wonderfully! as always i have just one thing that i would add if i were you

Walk *on* by my puddle of blood

i think that it flows a little better, but that is just me! again, wonderful job! keep it up hun! :] i know how you feel, i really do

Rusty? I thought it was great. Awesome emotions put into it. Nice rhyming and flow. Can't see any faults! Keep it up!