Looking in my life

Good poem , i like it :)

Its nice but...

It's the growing pain of helplessness that has had me conquered in this empty room
It's the creeping silence that always makes my troubles much more vivid than life intended
It's the lies my heart contains that makes my heart grow bitter
it's what i have thrown away in the past that will define me
But not my soul because the lord defines that.

*kindly move it like this*

It's the growing pain
of helplessness
that has had me conquered
in this empty room

It's the creeping silence
that always makes my troubles
much more vivid than life intended

It's the lies
my heart contains
that makes my heart grow bitter

It's what i have thrown away
in the past that will define me

But
not my soul
because
the lord defines that.

*maybe this one make it looks better than before. i like the lines you use to it. just bulit it right. keep the good work.*

--dian

Very strongly written xxx