Sunset(Haiku)

by Lonely Rider   Apr 21, 2008


On marine water,
Carroty billows mirrored..
sun crowns horizon..

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  • 16 years ago

    by anurag

    This is so beautiful... amazing picture painted here

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    This is incredibly written, so refreshing and filled with amount of power. I enjoyed in each word, you truly constructed this excellently and managed to make so clear and interesting imagery with just few words which is fantastic.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very captivating. You managed to portray remarkable beauty within just three lines which is very impressive. This is truly lovely haiku.
    The only thing that bothers me here is punctuation. I think that this poem would be even better if you write it like this:

    - On marine water,
    Carroty billows mirrored;
    sun crowns horizon.

    All in all, great write.

  • 16 years ago

    by Indian Comma Bean

    Very nice imagery, it was strong yet simple, I believe you captured this quite nicely. 5/5