Silence

by Lonely Rider   Apr 9, 2013


When
subsides
their plastic
concerns, and I
seem to have moved on,
that's when emptiness creeps
in, while Silence slowly frowns.

*I was trying to write an Etheree but well I am short of 3 lines :)
Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables

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  • 6 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    When
    subsides
    their plastic
    concerns,

    ^^I like how you have used the words plastic concerns for it relates to artificial feelings and emotions..nice one.

    and I
    seem to have moved on,
    that's when emptiness creeps
    in, while Silence slowly frowns.

    ^^This part really shows the writer's feelings and the relationships that has been removed from one's life creates an emptiness and a silence that turns cold..very nicely penned.

  • 6 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    I LOVE this form and poem by you Raj! ... One can feel the silence.

    Very Well Done :))