Amazing poem. I've already read it but I haven't had time to leave comment then, so here it comes:
I like the whole idea for the poem, also, the fact that you said so much within just three stanza is admirable. Very original and refreshing read. Your choice of words is good along with fantastic metaphors. The first line pulled me deeply into the poem, it's utterly brilliant. This piece seem simpler than your usual writes but I truly love it.