1 minute

by LuvLyLynn   May 3, 2008


I look at the clock it's only half past two,
As I wonder if you're thinking of me the way
I'm always thinking of you...

It's late in the evening but it's hard to fall asleep,
As I reminisce about the times we had these memories
I will keep...

I stare into the ceiling as flashbacks play over and
over again in my mind,
Wanting it to stop but it always intends to rewind...

Remembering the way how you'd look at me, your touch,
and the scent of your smell,
A battle with my head and heart, Who's winning?
I can't tell....

In truth, you got me wrapped around your fingers
but I can't let you see,
Hard for me to admit the fact how easily you can
break me...

I turn to look at the clock, to only find myself
sitting up (I sigh),
Frustrated to know how only a minute has gone by....

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  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Wonderful, just awesome! I could picture what was happening and it was all so cute! I would say it was very expressive and you did great, keep writing!

  • 15 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Wow. I loved the idea behind this. I was kind of like "eh just another love poem" at the beginning, but the end really snagged me. I love how all of that happened in one minute when it seems like it should be so much longer. When you're missing someone time seems to just creep by, and one minute can seem like 100 hours. I can relate to this poem really well. I did however think you could improve it a bit. There were a lot of I, me, you's it just throws off the poem for me. A poem really will sound better if you can think of a way to limit those words.

    reminisce

    ^^ I really loved that word. It's really descriptive. I think if you could add a few more of these type of words into your poem it would make it amazing. I'm really not one for love poems, but this one has something that just makes me can't hate it.

    Great job!

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

  • 15 years ago

    by noha

    Waw its nice sweet love poem,i realy enjoy my reading ,i love the flow and beautiful words you used here,and my favorait stanze:
    In truth, you got me wrapped around your fingers
    but I can't let you see,
    Hard for me to admit the fact how easily you can
    break me...
    well done 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    In the beginning I didn't really like this, but as I got towards the end, and read the final stanza, I was like WOW!
    The ending as amazing. It's crazy how time goes so slow but seems so fast when in love.
    Fantastic!
    5/5
    ~Lace

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