Tarnished Soul

First off, the title is quite eye catching. and the poem itself was unique. this is quite a creative write. you really kno how to atrract a reader's attention and keep it that way.

Each tear that's been shed, kills a little more
Her insides slowly dying, starting from the core
Her indifference prevails; her body grows numb
She can hardly acknowledge, this person she's become

that stanza did it for me. it was great. flawless. i think those lines really brought out the poem, and perhaps it's meaning. you did an excellent job on this one, keep it up. 5/5.

-Ashlei.

Isnt it sad what experiences in life can turn us into? I really felt this poem, because it hits close to home for me. I've done things that I am not proud of because I've let my soul become tarnished over the years. You wrote this very well and it expressed the tragedy of how one can become corrupt by life.

Maybe.. but the read is good. so it doesn't really matter. the descriptions are just so strong.. and very well written, that you don't even notice the lines are uneven..

but it's just so sad.. really makes you think after reading..
wonderful writing.. keep going

5/5

I like the smooth ending. gr8 job:)

Wow, lots of emotion came from this poem and your rhyme scheme was very good..
This life so insignificant; every action without consequence
^^A dominant cold heart, with cruelties so intense
Belittles every being, leaves them lying on the ground
While her hopes have been shattered, a new life she has found^^

The first stanza and my fac... the words you used gave great descriptions and in 4 lines you compacted a lot of stuff =D Great poem and good job 5/5