The Sixth Sense

by Normal is the Watchword   Jul 17, 2008


This poem is based on one of the main characters from the movie, "The Sixth Sense." The dots are left in to show a pause between the words displayed.
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...An ice...nestled in an evergreen curve...
Beneath...the evanescence...cloudless mist...
...A silhouette...slides...whispers...sees...
Light fades...asleep...an echo...in silence...
...Eyes...glance towards...a paled mirror...
I know...
For they understand...
The nudeness...of shelter

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  • 15 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    "...An ice...nestled in an evergreen curve..."
    ^^^
    [honestly, I like the begining, it's pretty strong and kind of drags you in.]

    "Beneath...the evanescence...cloudless mist..."
    ^^^
    [Now, here, I don't like the word "evanescene", but I do like the rest. That's solely my opinion, of course, but that's that. :).]
    "...A silhouette...slides...whispers...sees..."
    ^^^
    [This line, apart from the rest, isn't as good as them. Like, it doesn't stick out as the others does; the words are too cliche together and take it down.]
    "Light fades...asleep...an echo...in silence..."
    ^^^
    [A little bit of the same here, but i like the "an echo.. in silence" part.]
    "...Eyes...glance towards...a paled mirror..."
    ^^^
    [I really like this line. I'm not sure why, maybe because of the description of a "paled mirror", but I like it.]
    "I know...For they understand...The nudeness...of shelter"
    ^^^
    [This is a wonderful ending. It really pulled everything in and it was beautifully worded. Overall, it's very well written. Nicely done. :).]
    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Interesting and unique. Sounds like it should be read in a scarey movie. I think it is creative and unique. I just don't understand the pause at the beginning...you were pausing before you started...LOL! You still did a good job!

  • 15 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    What a comeback, great poem and thats also of my fav movie, i own its dvd and must have watched it more than 10 times. Though to be honest i didnt understood the movie when i watched it for the first time but as i was with my wife i pretended good.... :)

    Great poem dear, loved the way you expressed all the contradictions with so ease.

    all the best and take care

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Kaylee
    Welcome back :) You did it with a bang!!!!
    Awesome job....I love the way you have styled this one.
    Excellent!
    Love Cindy