I love you

by waiting 4 some1   Jul 19, 2008


You can see it in my eyes
How much I care about you

You can hear it from my heart
How much I would cherish and love you

You can feel it from my soul
The happiness when I'm around you

As words would never match your beauty
Tons of poems would fail to describe you

So what you only need to know
Is that i really do love you

note: edited by the help of Norhan

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  • 13 years ago

    by Carrotgirl

    I have a girlfriend who first language is German and and just learnng english is difficult. Whle your poems have the occasional phrase that doesn't quite work generally they are very good. I think you should be very proud and with persistance you will create some beautiful works. For what is importance is the heart and feelings behind the words. And that is why you will get so much out of poetry. I always say poetry is a window to your soul and you will learn so much about yourself and other will too.

  • 13 years ago

    by The Queen

    You can see it in my eyes
    How much I care about you
    ^^I dunno but I think this would look even better if there was a punctuation mark in it perhaps comma or something. They say eyes are the window of your soul, which mean how much you truly care for that person.

    You can hear it from my heart
    How much I would cherish and love you
    ^^Punctuation mark again would be necessary here. Its amazing how someone can hear your heartbeat exactly the same as how you want them to feel from you. I guess its possible only when you two are truly have the same genuine feelings toward each others.

    You can feel it from my soul
    My pleasure when I'm around you
    ^^Punctuation mark again would make this look even better. Although I think the word PLEASURE and soul didn’t fit much. I think it should be a something holy or saintly or deeper than pleasure coz it sounded like satisfaction or enjoyment. First stanza was eyes & care, second stanza was heart & cherish and love you which ways both ok unlike this third stanza.

    As words would never match your beauty
    Tons of poems would fail to describe you
    ^^It shown here a very strong adoration and admiration to that someone.

    so what you only need to know
    is that i really do love you
    ^^These two lines should be capitalized just like the rest of the stanzas. The word so I dun think was necessary. Actually you ended your poem in a subtle yet lovely way.

    If you go and read one of my poems called Love Isnt Imaginary, This poem is somehow a perfect match for it, for we both have described love in the same way.

  • 13 years ago

    by NoUr

    OMG!!
    few simple words but yet very touchy..
    amazingly sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet..
    please keep writing simply as u do..

  • 13 years ago

    by Goodbye

    Salam Adel,
    Please change "Tons of poems would fail to discribe you" "discribe" to "describe".

    I see you had a lot of emotions to share but I am not really fond of this poem. I think you could add some details or something to make it look more personal.

    Definitely not your best poem but anyways a lovely writing.

  • 13 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Adel,
    All that matters is love....it is such a pleasure to see you and Norgihan working together on this poem:) Two beautiful young people making beautiful poetry..it is enough to make my heart sing:)

    Love,

    5/5 Ingrid