Secrets Tattooed Upon Your Tongue

Beautiful piece ... It's like u have written through my feelings and I can relate to it so much !
I love it 😊❤️

First off, a very eye-catching and unique title, it fit the poem perfectly.

"The forgone
dampens my bones,
suspended before owl eyes.
Choosing to mock me
with affection,
never mine."

So powerful words to open this piece, making the reader feel everything you are feeling.

"I, of course crumble
for venom loves these veins.
Keeping secrets tattooed
upon tongue
cautiously away."

Wonderful wording, the real emotions flowing out of this piece is just incredible!

"Have you ever felt
a heart beat?
in truth it never brakes.
The pit where butterflies roam
becomes a haven for
insecurity."

I thought adding the question was brilliant, and this stanza is flawless, as your others are.

"I have,
of course
witnessed the past,
present and the future.
Yet bounded is what I am
inside the pages of you."

Very straightforward, and written straight from your heart, wow.

"Left right,
up down.
Down up,
right left.
Slow, fast
fast slow.
You, I.
I and you."

Very unique part, I thought it was creative, nice touch.

"And I of course crumble,
but in truth I never brake.
for it's just a metaphor
in my mind to keep me safe."

Beautiful ending, and I like how you repeat "I of course..." Not much more to say, you have talent beyond words, much luck...5/5 from me, take care...

A creative write. Very refreshing after reading almost similar poems everyday. Good style of writing. Strongly constructed lines made it beautiful. Well done!

First of all title truly captured my attention, it is clever and creative.

-The forgone
dampens my bones,
suspended before owl eyes.
Choosing to mock me
with affection,
never mine.-

I like the beginning of this piece because it is powerful. Last three lines amazed me because you have written them with some direct emotion and you put them in right length, they portray so interesting and intense picture. I like owl eyes, very refreshing and metaphorically clever.

-I, of course crumble
for venom loves these veins.
Keeping secrets tattooed
upon tongue
cautiously away. -

I like how you shaped this part, and it is very exciting because reader can't predict on which way this poem will develop.

-for venom loves these veins-
^pure beauty here. All I can say for this is wow, superb line.

-I, of course crumble-

In first line you should maybe put a comma after of course. I like your idea with this line very much, but if you put that comma I think that it will even more sound like that it expects that you crumble.

-Have you ever felt
a heart beat?
in truth it never brakes.
The pit where butterflies roam
becomes a haven for
insecurity.-

^I absolutely admire your writing and here is a perfect example of your poetic power. Wow! Beautiful stanza, it fascinated me.

-I have,
of course
witnessed the past,
present and the future.
Yet bounded is what I am
inside the pages of you. -

^Another incredible part. First three lines become more effective when you read the last one.
-Yet bounded is what I am
inside the pages of you.-
^this is written on nearly flawless way. I can't explain how much I like the way on which you have written this.

-Left right,
up down.
Down up,
right left.
Slow, fast
fast slow.
You, I.
I and you. -

^Totally original stanza. I like the rhythm which you created, very interesting. Intense lines, I like their indirect message.

-And I of course crumble,
but in truth I never brake.
for it's just a metaphor
in my mind to keep me safe. -

^This is probably my favorite part. Wow! Majestic stanza. Your conclusion fascinated me. I honestly love this poem, it is one of my favorites from you. I missed your poetry.
Anyway I can find better word for this ending than priceless, same goes for the whole poem.

I enjoyed in this one a lot and I am really glad that I read it.