My Faraway Home

by The Queen   Oct 11, 2008


MY FARAWAY HOME

Crisp afternoon breeze mirrors a happy home
of tranquility, that lies abundantly beneath
the azure sky and white feathery clouds.

Delicate scent of a blossoming land
gathered around lively butterflies-
and chirping birds on the trees.

Cone-shaped mountains far above the ground
towering the rivers, serenading the blue oceans
almost heaven, assuring an ease of mind .

Ease of mind no longer, only regrets remain
misty teardrops growing as city lights-
out-shined the beauty of the moon.

Hopes and dreams grew fainter
virtues became unknown, forgotten
emerged a cruel world of insanity.

Perhaps no real home compares so much-
to the beauty of my far away home,
lost and tattered by your sophisticated plan.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    What I loved about this piece is the descriptions. They weren't the same cliche wording that is used but you explained the shape and the sight of it so well. A well-expressed piece and I was glad to have come upon this. The style was easy to read and flowed continuously in my mind while I was reading. Excellent job, I have no suggestions.

    5/5 from me, God bless you, child of God!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 15 years ago

    by HaileyHelen

    It really does seem quite peaceful. I guess whenever you put an actual person in a beautiful surrounding even that can;t help ease a troubled mind. Well, anyways. I thought this had great imagry. There is an excellent rhythmic pattern. I really enjoyed reading this. Really fantastic job! 10/5

  • 15 years ago

    by vintage darling

    Your vivid imagery and descriptions were so well written
    i really enjoyed reading this poem.

    you had me at the first stanza:
    Crisp afternoon breeze mirrors a happy home
    of tranquility, that lies abundantly beneath
    the azure sky and white feathery clouds.

    it really set the mood and caught my attention right then.

    you're a really good writer
    keep it up.

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I really like your style and find no flaw at all

    Another beautifully written poem
    5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

  • 15 years ago

    by Scorpio

    What a wonderfull poem !!!!
    i can c that u r missing the old places but somehow u dont regret being where u r now thats really so deep..

    4 sure i have to give u 5/5 on this

    expressed perfectly

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