Dead and Gone

by The Queen   Oct 12, 2009


Fading like a flower
on the highway of my secret life,
clouded by tarnished memories
-of broken promises and masquerades

I could not save you, from the
-falling silent of conscience
stumbling, breaking on regrets...
(Darling, do yourself a favor, let it go.)

Perhaps, rescue those haggard memories
drowning amid rivers of your lies,
and extirpate impure thoughts
that are tattooed on your mind.

I remember how you used to be
my four letter word, you would
-shut the stars and bury them beneath
the waning moon--to resurrect
my outshined once timeless beauty...

But...my fantasy gone sober
your eyes, no longer
like the living colors of my dreams

Instead,
the Machiavellian scent of your
tongue injured the very air I breathe,
like a deadly butterfly
soaring into the skies
of undying lust and ambition--
to play my fragile heart,
... inescapably...

Eleventy one seconds before my
lungs collapsed, my heart--feebly lying
on a deathbed not ready for love's deadly venoms.
My pen started to bleed a thousand stings
of pain, and a million ways of how
I loved you, until the horizon swells up
while on the burying ground,
...a crystalline muse to be found.

For an RTVW Club Contest
Fading like a Flower [first line] - title from Melpomene
Crystalline Muse [last line] - title from Mouris

Copyright (C) 2009 by EvanescentMoon

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  • 14 years ago

    by Ducky Ramone

    Excellent! especially 'my pen started to bleed a thousand stings of pain'. explains heartbreak poetry so well.

  • 14 years ago

    by Poetic Justice

    This is very well-written. It was very moving and complex. Great. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Blissful

    WOW. Okay shock has faded...now on to the poem. :]

    "Fading like a flower"
    ^I love how you started the piece with some alliteration. Something simple and not to much to overpower the poem. Just enough to capture my attention and make me read more.

    "stumbling, breaking on regrets... "
    ^ Ah I know that feeling oh too well. Great way to express it.

    "(Darling, do yourself a favor, let it go.)"
    ^I loved that input! Gave the poem some flavor.

    "drowning amid rivers of your lies,
    and extirpate impure thoughts"
    ^Great choice of words here. Gave your poem a sense of sophistication. Nice touch.

    "-shut the stars and bury them beneath
    the waning moon--to resurrect
    my outshined once timeless beauty..."
    ^Flawless. Don't even have words to express how beautiful this is. Although there should be a space between out and shined.

    "the Machiavellian scent of your
    tongue injured the very air I breathe,"
    ^Just gets better and better!

    I wish I ran across this poem sooner so I could vote for it in the weekly contest because it sure deserved a win. I was blown away but this piece, it was surely one of the best I've read in a while. Your word choice was exquisite, the flow was even throughout the whole piece, your imagery was spot on in creating the scene nicely in my mind. I loved your input of punctuation, added a nice touch to the piece.

    Well done!
    I really enjoyed reading this.
    *5/5*

  • 14 years ago

    by Saul

    Wow! Your writing is so intense! The words the imagery are so profound! Very impressive!

  • 14 years ago

    by Sourav

    Beautiful poetry. The metaphors you've used are fantastic. I liked the tone of this poem. Wonderful write!

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