Poised To Kill

by DarkCrystalbtrfy   Nov 30, 2009


Glance behind, finger on the gun
Poised to kill, let time be undone
Madness caressing a crazed mind
Convinced that no one can comprehend
The loneliness behind the sin
That sin that causes you to lose control
To take what was yours, to damn them to hell
To see the haunted look in those eyes
Right before you murdered what was inside
Laughing because you don't care
Causing the lights to blink and flare
That darkness of derangement hovering oh so near by
Threatening to consume your already twisted mind
The prey that you hunt and kill
Will never be enough to satisfy
The aching emptiness that fills your bones
Whispering the truth that you hate
Condemning you always to slay
Those innocent people that have wondered astray
You're the one casting the light
On others darkest fears at night
You're the one spreading the fear
Those chilled eyes always look at you with despair
Tracing there every step one at a time
Your ruby red eyes don't blink but stare
Taking in all that's there
You glance behind, finger on the gun
Poised to kill, time won't be undone

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  • 12 years ago

    by MyaEve

    This wasn't an awesome poem.
    This was brilliant, and I enjoyed it.
    The fear it expressed was amazing, made the hair on the back of my neck stand up.
    Anger expressed in this poem was dark, darker than any tunnel, and I loved that. Although it didn't rhyme at some parts, it was very good(:

  • 14 years ago

    by WakingFreedom

    Another brilliant write! It was an awesome part two for Ruby Red Tears. Gah, I love the imagery and the emotion. It expressed anger so vividly I grew goosebumps. This piece is true with anger and an excellent write. 5/5
    WakingFreedom

  • 14 years ago

    by IMMORTAL PAIN

    Awesome poem. i can relate to this becuz i have built up anger lol. very good. very very good. i love the ending. 10/5!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    I like your sense of repetition at the end and beginning , but i would much rather if the rest of the poem rhymed ; but that's alot of work to do . Still , fantastic idea and very sad . Really well done , 5/5 .

  • 14 years ago

    by Jessie

    I thouroughly enjoyed this poem. It read it through a few times to really let it sink in.
    My favourite was "Madness caressing a crazed mind
    Convinced that no one can comprehend
    The loneliness behind the sin"

    I dont really think you need to improve on much. It had a good flow to me, and an amazing theme. Good work:)

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