Morass of Life.

Such a striking word choice that sent the pain into the reader's veins, a haunting write filled with a sad thought in each line. Take care dear.

~MaryAnne

The strong words you have used to bring out the deep sadness within, goes right into the
reader's heart and touches..an excellent
write of sadness..

Wonderful write!

Immobile in a morass of life-

*I love this first line. Very well crafted and it starts the poem off right*

ankles shackled by
recalcitrant obstacles-

*Love the diction here. Strong but not too verbose so that's good. Really adds on to the imagery*

an effete heart strives

*Hmm not aure I know what "effete" means but I like to see new words in pieces so nice work there*
to escape plight.

memories; ubiquitous-
encountered with each footstep;
trenchant to nebulous sanity-

*Love love love this part. Flawlessly written dear*

lucid future no more-
teardrops become banal;
yet explode with pain.

*A sad but cleverly written piece. Your diction gave this a new kind of sadness. It was your typical sad poem and I think that's why I enjoyed it so much. Nik*

Temps
So much sadness reflects from your words.
Good job!
Love Cindy