The Secret Jungle

by Lady Nik   Aug 5, 2010


I can't keep fighting myself
armed with nothing but
regret. I said I was sorry
and they landed me here
in this secret jungle inside
my mind.

These thoughts--
my thoughts are like
animals. Lashing out at
me from the depths of the night.
Coming at me from all corners
of the horizon and I have only
one defense mechanism.

waking up.

What happens when I can't wake
up and I'm lost inside this place.
A secret place created by the inner
workings of this twisted
brain of mine. Lost
forever with creatures
too strong and too wild
for me to tame.

I can't ask for help,
send out flames
to signal my destruction.
No one can save me
from myself.

*for a contest*

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  • 13 years ago

    by Spirit

    I think that THEY in the fiist verse souls be THAT.
    The line "all corners of the horizon." sound off try re-wording it.
    A secret place created by the inner
    workings of this twisted
    brain of mine. "this secret place created by the twisted workings of my mind." I thought that this line sounded better re-worded.

    I love this piece especially the last line. I did suggest a few tweaks that I thought helped with wording issues, but they're optional. I really like the guessing game/mind tease that played throughout the piece.
    I'm glad that I read this poem.
    Thank you so much.
    >~Spirit~>

  • 13 years ago

    by Chelsey

    And I have only
    one defense mechanism.

    waking up.

    ^^ i reaally loved those lines! I love your similes in this poem! I thought you did excellent for whatever contest that was! Worth the read, unique and very creative!

  • 13 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Interesting perspective, hope you can let go of the regret you have...because with it it can do a lot of damage.. A good write

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Well done..u flipped the whole quotation through my mind...i loved the last 7 lines.. b honest///been my fav...i understood and loved completely.

    ur a gd poet
    gd luck
    5/5

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