Total Eclipse of the Heart

I can't and will not disagree with what Brit said..
this poem which is the 1st to be read by me..yet.
Is truly breathtaking !!

I love the enchantment of your words..u have a very possessive and a very inspiring ...

Electrocute me against gravitational pull
because the radical stars coerce every milky bone
until I am begging to fly past galaxies.

I doodle your heart as my own universe,
the moon shadowed sketch of your face
and while I feel the life igniting deep inside,
heat flares quiver with concentrated chemistry.

1 unnoticed smile that can synthesize
2 dusky eyes always searching for a fate
3 ways to listen and discern a heartbeat
^^i usually hate numbers..but the way u used it here..was very unique!..very deep..and the amazing wording worked well for u!

>>i didn't like a lot the stanza after it tho..was not as poetic as the rest of the poem. doesnt mean its bad..at all. But the rest was deeper..

like this..

Electra lights shape the night
free illuminations waiting,
constellations will swirl under feet.
^^omg
fantastic..truly fantastic..i just love each single word..

Take me into your blaze
before I lose my consciousness,
an ink patch once upon a desert planet.
^^a very strong ending..I can't believe..how amazing this was..how goosebumpsable lol

5/5...never cease to write..
thnx for Britt that I got to read this poem!

The first stanza is my favorite. Overall I found this uniquely and well expressed, churning in its meaning. Thank you for sharing.