Best Regards

by Sunshine   Oct 8, 2010


To the one who finds joy
as my shuddering breath threatens
to be my last..
Although that I am not gone.
Does my withered soul delight you?
Shall I mask the misery I live in,
teasing you a bit too more?

I constantly hold on..

Nevertheless I am
a lost ocean, opened and wide
leaping from one shore to another.
Yet I never find a home

A smothered spirit beating
in a pleading heart-

That pumps still..

A wild wasteland of brine along with
broken sand..
Where airstream blows pieces of me away
from one second to another..
Drifting more of my lost dreams
that live still, though darkened by
demented shadows of schemes

A lost spirit holding time in one hand
and love in the other.
Yet losing both as they compound
duress upon fate

I always held on..yet-

To the one who finds joy
as my shuddering breath threatens
to be my last..
Although that I am not gone
Does my unbreakable soul tease you?
Or shall I unmask the misery living
inside of me and the misery I live in
Pleasing you a bit too more?

>Well; You win..

Finest Regards;
Me

By: Rania Moallem

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  • 13 years ago

    by chind

    WOOOOOOW! NANNNNA! this was crazy. I love how you took the first stanza and just changed the words around, bringing a completely new tone into the piece. This was so amazingly crafted, and an amazing write! I think your one liners really do help to create the effect and set the mood. GREAT WRITE!!!!

  • 13 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    This is a raw, authentically deep,
    and honestly moving piece of your Soul-voice
    revealed....your word choices, and layout
    are quite effective...

    RE the ending:
    the dark forces can ONLY "win" IF...
    IF...there is a contest.....
    no contests dear...only Adds fuel
    to the fire of negativity....

    A great and ancient Chinese book of wisdom,
    the 'I Ching', says:
    "The best way to fight evil is
    to make energetic progress in the good.."

    There IS So Much More to be discovered...
    Stay Alert, Stay Interested, and......
    STRIVE ON! I say...
    Strive on....'-)

  • 13 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    What can I say? It is another masterpiece of well delivered emotion
    Great free flow

  • 13 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    Now that was intense and the reader can't turn from the page till each word has been read.
    I have to agree with Ingrid. Never surrender :-) bring out the warrior in your self.

  • 13 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    To the one who finds joy
    as my shuddering breath threatens
    to be my last..
    Although that I am not gone
    Does my unbreakable soul tease you?
    Or shall I unmask the misery living
    inside of me and the misery I live in
    Pleasing you a bit too more?

    >Well; You win..

    The one hard lesson is that no matter what
    happens or however great misery is, one
    should not let that take over. Misery just
    makes one even more miserable! Strength
    is within us...and whatever it is that is draining you, I hope you find/get the strength to fight it..take care.

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