Winters Long Nights II

The sky finally cries,
releasing pure memories
obtain from billowing seas
captured from those perished.

WOW! I like this stanza, the way you have described snowfall! Simply lovely!

Now enchanting moments
encompass the forest,
pausing the still beauty of
winters long nights.

This is such a nice finish..a lovey in fact an enchanting description about winter's beauty! Loved the read :)

Struggling against all odds,
withered branches sway
embracing the rapture
Nature bestows all around.
^^wow..again ..again..how I'm loving these..u started with the same coherence u ended the 1st part with!!!..I love ur word choice..affecting me a lot..I only suggest adding (, or ;) after rapture..wen i reread it..with stopping for a while..had an impact as I read the last line. But as u wanna :)

Plants decay and rot away
frozen in time while
layers of white cover
remnants of their remains.
^^^Jad u are very unique..I love the image..and the way you are being able
to picturize every single line u wanna , in our mind..i can see the reflection of snow..and dead plants all around

The sky finally cries,
releasing pure memories
obtain from billowing seas
captured from those perished.
^^wow...strongest expressions
about rain.ive ever DEEPLY read-yet.
incredible stanza..

Now enchanting moments( i love that word..i llove it ..i love it)

encompass the forest,
pausing the still beauty of
winters long nights.
^^^^jad aww i love this poem..i love these parts...i can't wait till I submit this comment and go read the 3rd one.

-you are a GIFT.
5/5

Interesting to see a continuation of this 'series'. I thought you did just as well as the first part. I liked how you switched it up and instead of the wolf crying, it is now the sky. Although it was not the strongest metaphor, I liked the idea as it was different from the first part. Nice job..

Plants decay and rot away
frozen in time while
layers of white cover
remnants of their remains.

^^
Remnants of their remains somehow sounds off, like you said the same thing twice.

The sky finally cries,
releasing pure memories
obtain from billowing seas
captured from those perished.

^^
obtain, should be obtained

Other than this it was a beautiful poem, Austin! Like I was flying above a winter landscape:)

Well done,
5/5 Ingrid

A beautifully written poem about winter! :) I love your nature poems Austin.. you write them with such ease and outstanding images for the mindseye :D

BRavo!!! & Very Well Done :)
Lol, Olwin