Bid Farewell

Well, Nana, I am back and am getting to your poems now. You seem to have kept your poetic touch and also it seems increased your skills! :] This poem was very descriptive and that is one thing I really like about this poem. It was as though I could actually see everything happening around me. There were also some emotions in this piece keeping it alive and heart filled. I liked the flow of this poem, which seemed to go on through each line undisturbed by any interruption. The structure was god as well even though it was a free verse.

"No-

for such sadness has a language of
its own.
No winters farewell would illuminate
the mourning oceans in my eyes.
Nor storms traveling would bring fresh air
where air dwells in disguise."

This was my favorite line as it gave a sad tone to this poem and also should the reader a new twist to how things are being seen in this poem. Also this part shows some of the imagery I was talking about. It seems as if I can actually see all of this.

In all, I really liked the overall message of the poem though it is a sad one. And how you did it in free verse. I think it made it easier to get your emotions down on paper. Hope to see happier poems! :] Great job and keep writing.

Beautiful poetry!

I like this poem, its interesting and made me think about it, and read it carefully. I liked how you used 'no' on its own to change the direction, like you woke quickly from a dream back to reality.

Lol just regarding Mike's pm toward what really happens: she does not pass away no; actually it is an emotional death; unreal..and so although the sun shines; but she won't realize it.

Yes i am speaking about two farewells; but it's up to the reader to be able to get them " both" or not.

:P

Fuggy and wistful are not words I her everyday, but that adds to the mystery of this flawlessly flowing mesmerizing sad poem, that seems the linger at the edge contemplation and the fresh air that nearly blew me away yet left me wondering about deeper and deeper meaning of this poem