Auf Wiedersehen

Haha aww danke Ihnen so sehr Ingrid:)

Ich werde dich nie im Stich lassen, mein Liebchen!! Du hast es sehr gut geschrieben:)

5/5 Ingrid xxx

Short,simple sweet! Estoo me gusta mami!! :) made me smile... !

I loved the phrase used here a lot, I learned something new. I'm glad you told us what the phrase meant, it brought more meaning to the poem and plus I would have thought this was a person if you wouldn't have revealed it. I like the usage of the phrase to end the poem, it is perfect. Loved it.

"Numb, I stand still above the
inflamed prints that your steps
left behind..."

^^^ I'm sure I've told you this before, and I'm sure I'll tell you this a thousand more times, but, I LOVE the way you start off your poems. This without reading the rest of the poem yet, this makes me crave more. Also, I love the imagery in it. It leaves me with a plethora of questions, and a strange feeling in my tummy.

"I chatter to thousands of grains,
shocked, unaware I get swiped
with this wistful current"

^^^ "Wistful current" I love that. I love the stanza. It flows together very nicely. The words you choose fit in perfectly.

"gathering my emotions that you
abandoned at the edges of my
crumbling corners"

^^^ I'm speechless. Trying to pin point and dissect this stanza is so difficult for me to do. I just love it. Worded simply, yet when laced together by an amazing poet like you... It makes me speechless, depressed, and intrigued.

"holding tight onto my sentiments,
until we meet again"

^^^And have I ever told you that when you end poems I want to kick someone because it's over? This stanza is my favorite. I love cliff hangers, and the feeling it leaves me with. And even though this poem is a lot shorter than I would have liked it, you made it work, and you made it great. :) Like you always do. ^.^

Oy. Something that stood out to me: all the stanzas you wrote had three lines in it except the last one. -strokes chin- Intahrestin'. This is making me sad, I really wish you would have made it longer, I absolutely love how you write, and it pains me to only read four stanzas it's not enough. -withdrawal- You're poems are like a drug to me. lol. You did an amazing job, Captain Rania. I just read it over again-- grrrrrrrrrreat. It reads and flows incredibly, and once again, the images left with me are marvelous. You really did a great job with painting a picture.
KEEP WRITING!
I BEG YOU!
5/5
Erna