If You Could See Me Now

Once again through cold winters,
I have walked with you...
but I was alone, as if numb?
^You're not really asking a question here so I would change your question mark to a period.

I only knelt down to pick
myself, and you were gone
as I stood firm on my feet
seeking to carry with you
the moon, so we return it
to the land where it belongs
^At first glance it sounds like a few words may be missing. It should be 'I only knelt down to pick myself [up]' & 'so we [could] return it to the land where it belongs.' I may be wrong, it just sounded off to me.

You really express pain here and then at the end you can see the strength and feel the strength in your voice as you are moving on. Its really sad when you have this person next to your side but they don't really prove that they are there, thus making you feel alone. I thought you wrote something simple here yet it definitely held meaning.

Masterpiece as always but the last lines really grabbed me amazing write

Awww... another amazing poem Rania! I love it... I like that you tell a story without being too elaborate, and make the reader put it together themselves. And I liked the way you ended it... Simply "I am moving on" .. such a short yet powerful sentence! Well done my friend :)

I also envy the way you just write these poems. You seem to have no stop to the creativity and emotions. Your poems are so full of life creating images and ripping ones mind to pieces at the cold truth of your words. Well, now that I got my introduction out of the way, lets begin on your poem. The emotions in this poem delivered a powerful punch and the imagery is also wonderful. I could easily picture things in my head and I was really taken away with the story in which you had this poem written into so you could get your message across.

"I only knelt down to pick
myself, and you were gone
as I stood firm on my feet
seeking to carry with you
the moon, so we return it
to the land where it belongs"

This stanza had the biggest impact on me. The way in which you describe everything and then you come to this realization is simply stunning. I love the many things you give the reader to think about! I found this to be the strongest stanza and I found it in a very good place in this poem. You didn't blow us away with your first stanza but decided to give to us in the middle and then go down from the climax into your last stanza.

All in all, your poems seem to show improvement every time I read them. Your always open to critque, which enables your poem to reach greater strength and meaning. I did like the change of the title as well. Think it makes it sound more interesting. I hope you continue to always show these fabulous skills ans writing and as always hope you step out of your comfort box of sadness and go into the realm of happiness! Just once. ;] Anyway, I think you have done a splendid job. Great job and keep writing! :]

But I was alone, and as if numb?
^^^how about dropping 'as if' & '?'

I only knelt down to pick myself,
^^^ pick yourself what? You would not kneel down to pick yourself up, but you might pick something else up (mystery) maybe you can tie in the 'letters' &/or 'ink'

seeking to carry with you
the moon, so we return it
to the land where it belongs
^^^fun imagery, myth-like

God, what a fool I was,
knocking on heavens door
^^^was this a Dylan reference?

while you were burning
yourself in hell,
Well; I too ran out of ink.
^^^what's hell for a writer? Good implication of writers block