Underwater

The pillowed current takes it away,
Lets it fall into a dream [nightmare?]
of suffocation and dancing stars.

*Loved this part sooo much! There were so many reason why I picked this poem as 1st place. One is you took something so simple as "underwater" and created this wondeful story from it. I love it when people do that. You imagery was very well penned and not complocated at all, same for the dicition.*

Cerulean diamonds
in a glittered wasteland.

*That was brilliant. When I read that my mind went "whoa!!" lol such creative images here. I loved readind this poem from the first time you posted it til the end of the contest. Very very very well done. Nik*

Very nice pace and good mood representation!

Wow.. I'm speechless. I love this poem! So impressive... I loved the whole topic and meaning behind the poem... I can relate. I love the metaphors and the way you expressed these emotions... I loved the structure as well, I think it was very appropriate for this poem. Brilliant poem!

A swirl-
in a swirl,
of a fallen embrace.
^^^I like the image of a fallen embrace; it reminds me of Rodin's Fallen Caryatid carrying her stone

The pillowed current takes it away,
Lets it fall into a dream [nightmare?]
of suffocation and dancing stars.
^^^I think it would improve the flow and not lose your sense of uncertainty to remove the brackets & insert a hyphen instead

Or is this a place for the beaten.
You're not welcome.
^^^This could be taken in at least three ways, but in the sense that it is rejecting him, it does not fit with the sense that you are searching desperately for him. In the sense that you do not give recognition to his thanks, it is a non-sequitur. In the sense that he is excluded by dint of not having been beaten, it should be clarified: They do not welcome you here; you are not allowed here, or something.

Cerulean diamonds
in a glittered wasteland.
^^^ ?Glittering?

There's no life here.
Is this what I really wanted?
To be lost,
Underwater?
^^^Good finish! Despite my suggestions, I think this is a top notch poem! 5/5

Your creativity is astonishing. You always have the most unique, inventive ideas to share with the readers. Love how the title fitted well with the poem :D